r/OCPoetry • • 14h ago

Feedback Please A song to a muse of mine

1 Upvotes

In my head lives a tiny muse
He lives within my head.
And every single time I lose
He drinks what tears I shed

I say this not to insult his
good name, but to give thanks,
To bless that little soul of his
For all that’s in my head.

I must apologise to him,
He’s not been doing great.
For the tears he loves to feast on
Have all but left my face.

I wish not to starve him out of
Me, for it is a shame.
For he taught me to run from love
Yet he is not to blame!

Thus, a tribute! To this here muse,
You taught me all I know.
Yet all I am is feeling used,
Do you feel we have grown?

So to my little companion,
My dear partner in crime,
You taught me how to love, to run,
But now the tears have dried!

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r/OCPoetry • • 2h ago

Just Sharing Fly Higher - from 'when Life takes a turn'

3 Upvotes

Hello,

I'm new here. I've recently published my own poetry collections book called 'when life takes a turn' by T.B Ash. The book can be found on: https://www.amazon.com/dp/B0HP5S3RXP

I'm sharing one of the poems, called Fly Higher (from page 7):

Fly Higher

I know how high I can fly.

Or at least,

I used to.

You tell me

I'm not good enough,

that I won't survive

the outside world.

You want it that way.

I'm a bird

trapped in a tiny cage.

I want to fly away,

to soar high above it all.

But everytime I try,

you cut down my wings.

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https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/6LvjUHqfOG


r/OCPoetry • • 2h ago

Just Sharing I am a Fraud

7 Upvotes

I am not a good man,

I am not even a sane man.

I cheat, I lie, I forge, I manipulate, I cry, I weep.

At each night, i don't know how I sleep.

Sometimes I feel like a leech,

Living off host, sucking their lives.

Sometimes I feel like a saint,

Not with a blessing of knowledge,

But a curse of cunning genius.

I pretend to the world that I am better.

But inside, I know:

That isn't who I am. That isn't reality.

At the end of the day, it's all hokum.

Sometimes I feel like i don't deserve

What I aim to achieve,

What I received, what I'm entitled to.

I don't know how I sleep at night.

I don't know what I am.

I don't know what I deserve.

I don't know what I am doing.

But at end, i can say for sure:

I am a fraud, I am a fraud.

I want to return to the purity.

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r/OCPoetry • • 6h ago

Just Sharing Rome’s Tragedy

2 Upvotes

Profaned I was, till lives yet to unfold,
defiled, consummated by that viper cold.
Garbed as an emperor, in pomp and fame,
he made me Poppaea, and Nero called my name.

He swallowed me till naught was mine to own,
and raised me, at that feast, to glory on the altar stone.
He made my torso ornament inestimable,
and, amid incense and sepulchral stages,
deified me, and made me untouchable.

He gave me a bouquet, ethereal, divine,
whose perfume pressed upon this breast of mine.
I touched its petals; in that gesture I consecrated,
and, breathing its fragrance, that union with poison I venerated.

I breathed it in, a devotee chaste and sure,
and watched myself drain from that rite impure.
For belladonna was the bouquet dire,
and at last a petal tumbled to the ground,
sealing my last, humble sigh as I expire.

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/YbV7Y6TXci

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r/OCPoetry • • 9h ago

Feedback Please Winter comes home - A Haiku

7 Upvotes

Winter comes home

Cracks bloom

People ripen

1, 2


r/OCPoetry • • 9h ago

Feedback Please The Queen Beneath the Boughs

5 Upvotes

For those upon the fruitful throne,

We hear beneath the olden stone.

“Sing softly, sisters, of the green,

Of elder roots and crowns unseen.”

When spring awoke in silver shoots,

The orchards bowed with boughs of fruit;

The barley rose, the apples swelled

And overflowing were the wells.

Rivers flowed, from whence unseen

What mortal loss fills evergreen?

The grove would reach the heavens’ door

Their roots dug deeper, evermore

The Queen wore blossoms in her hair,

And took her husbands, fair and fair;

His name was sung, his cup was raised,

His banner hung, his memory praised.

But when the boughs grew bright with bloom,

A cradle stirred within the room.

The court would feast, the bells would ring,

And all the fields would wake to spring.

But hush, my sisters, hush the hall;

The oldest trees remember all.

Their hollow hearts, their knotted hands,

Know what is owed to fruitful lands.

For every seed to them she spoke,

“For every child shall rise like oak”

To wear the crown and greet the sun,

A branch took root where loss had run.

Deep in the grove, where none do tread,

The Queen laid down her fairest thread;

And where the roots drank from the ground,

A nameless seed took root profound

A stone was set, a prayer was said,

The mortals mourned the vanished dead,

Yet the leaves, in whispers green,

Knew the price that grew their Queen.

But still the pears hung fat and sweet,

Still poppies burned beside the wheat;

Still milk-white lambs in meadows played,

And never once the harvest swayed.

And when the final spring drew near,

She knew the grove would quake in fear;

A thousand leaves, a thousand cries,

Rose like a forest through her eyes.

From her breath, from root and thorn,

The only royal, safely born.

A babe beneath the boughs was laid,

A crown of living leaves was made;

Her eyes were dark as woodland pools,

Her fate, a thread of many spools.

The suitors sought her regal name.

Naught to know their children’s fame.

The Queen wore blossoms in her hair

And took her husband's fair and fair

The trees and grass forever sing

“Long live the Queen! Long live the spring!”

And in the grove, where shadows keep

The names no mortal tongue may speak,

A sapling stirred beneath the fern—

And all the grove would shake in turn.

So sing, my sisters, low and slow,

Of all that blooms and all that grows.

For some roots drink of rain and dew,

And some of what the world once knew.

For those upon the fruitful throne,

We hear beneath the olden stone.

"Sing softly, sisters, of the green,

Of elder roots and crowns unseen"

Feedback on other poems -

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r/OCPoetry • • 10h ago

Feedback Please The Distance Between Stars

2 Upvotes

everything reminds me of you.

the stars,
like the night we shared a telescope,
searching for things so far away.

the birds, perched in the morning dew;
the monkeys, frozen in time,
with their wandering eyes.

old movies and television shows,
medieval torture,
the dresses you wore,
and how lovely you looked in them.

the strangest things
still seem to belong to you,
though you no longer belong to me.

do you think of me
when i think of you?

i wonder if the stars
ever bring you back to that night,
if you remember what we saw,
or if they’re just stars to you.

time passes,
and the distance between us grows,
yet my mind, somehow,
always finds its way back to you.

i see you in things
you’ve never even touched,
in places you’ve never been,
in moments you will never know.

and no matter where my mind wanders,
everything reminds me of you.

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/rGvqKUWxbt

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/6gYXlTreUo


r/OCPoetry • • 12h ago

Feedback Please The Lord's Prayer

4 Upvotes

Our Father, who art in heaven,
hallowed be thy name
I come the way I learned as a child,
small, and certain You are listening

Thy kingdom come
Let it come like his hand in mine
for the length of this prayer,
his breath right next to me
when he turns to say peace be with you
and almost means it for me
I echo his name unto You
on every bead of my rosary

Thy will be done
on earth as it is in heaven
You knit me together in my mother's womb
and I've tried to keep every stitch
since I first wore white
and took Your Word as my own

Give us this day
one reason to stay
Give me him
Let him love me,
let him slip a ring on my finger,
and let the doves' wings echo our name

And forgive us our trespasses
O my God, I am heartily sorry,
though I've never been sorry for the wanting,
only for the asking

As we forgive those
who taught me to fold my hands
before they taught me
what I wasn't allowed to hold

Lead us not into temptation
I never had far to go
It sits with me at Mass,
beneath my ribs, where it's always been

But deliver us from evil
I know what this is
Even Judas was sorry,
and I'm still asking

I ask this as your servant,
your altar boy,
your son

Amen.

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/wOVeukYEXe

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/f5mduJud7N


r/OCPoetry • • 12h ago

Just Sharing 11 seconds

2 Upvotes

I walked down the street.

The needles of the grass poking at each pore on my leg.

The cool air swift against the roots of my face,
My eyes drawn to an unfamiliar, uncomfortable, mourning scene.

1 second
My eyes glance, but don’t move.

2 seconds
My mind begins to wander back to when I was a little girl, wondering where the tree trunk was.

3 seconds
A blue bike.
Pink flowers on its handles.
Tiny. Rusty.
Loud, laughing, mocking.

4 seconds
A father, a name so bitter to my tongue.

5 seconds
A father, holding his child as she rides the bike.

6 seconds
I’m still a child, wondering where my tree trunk is.

7 seconds
Training wheels attached to my foot, the chains attached to my heart.

8 seconds
I wish upon a tree trunk to teach me how to move the chains and pedal my heart.

9 seconds
A father, upon me; I am undeserving.

10 seconds
The wind presses deep inside my dermis, its cold mocking.

11 seconds
My eyes close, my feet move. I no longer want to feel the wind deep inside or the pedals protruding deep into my hands.

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/Jvb85e4qv8

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/C2aHzxBWfG


r/OCPoetry • • 13h ago

Feedback Please An Ode To Goddess Durga

3 Upvotes

The Gods silently stared at the anarchy.
Evil proclaimed its victory with triumphant laughter.
And yet, no thunder broke,
No sword was drawn!

Helpless and forsaken were the hopes of resurrection.
Buried and forgotten were the songs of valor.
The corpses of warriors who once stood for bravery
Lay silently in the dust,
Mere effigies of defeat.

Disdained and disquieted were the souls of the saints,
Vandalized and marred were their sacred tombs.
And yet, no trident triumphed,
No mace struck mighty blows.

Then came Motherhood in the form of a roaring rage,
Transcending the delusions of the demonic age.
The world trembled, yet celebrated the ravage,
As victory was once again anointed by the heavens.

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/5g07WF0ZuF

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/DQ4hp0VIew


r/OCPoetry • • 13h ago

Just Sharing Rabbit Family

2 Upvotes

Mr. and Mrs. Rabbit lived at number 40 Downing street.
Their flat was a warm and cozy, pink walled abode.
They were an inseparable pair.
Every hour of the day they spent together.
In the night they huddled together to share the warmth.

One Thursday morning Mr. and Mrs. Rabbit opened their front door to find two tiny kits.
They took them in and kept them alive, and the kits thrived.
The Rabbits comforted their young bunny babies with snuggles.
They fed them and kept them warm.
Until one day the bunnies were no longer bunnies but full grown rabbits.
It distressed Mr. and Mrs. Rabbit to be no longer needed, but they had done their duty as rabbit parents.

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/1xgx0ze/comment/19rr67axo10g0/?context=3&utm_source=share&utm_medium=web3x&utm_name=web3xcss&utm_term=1&utm_content=share_button

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r/OCPoetry • • 14h ago

Feedback Please Old Chub on Langford street

3 Upvotes

Chub Mcgroob lived down langford street
He'd have his fill of pancakes saturday afternoon Ihop
He'd get in the door go straight for the menu 
Then inch closer to the waitress Sally ann

The same one he saw every time he came for those cakes
She was always on shift at that time
He'd come through the door like it was just the pancakes he was interested in
But down at the table when he was warming up he'd turn up the charm

So was he there for Sally ann? or those sweet soft syrupy cakes back there?
It was a mystery to her and to him maybe it was just a transaction
Chub didn't seem to think, he just seemed to bang into things
He should have been nicknamed clumsy

His legs would almost buckle under him as he walked back to his shack on Lanford street
Sometimes he'd struggle to get in the front door for all the liquer they put in his drink
One day the neighbors were on the street and they observed Chubs halfway into the front door
He was in a state and lurched forward and back until it was obvious what he was doing...

He projectile vomited into his own house
The neighbors of langford street just whispered to themselves
And covered their children's eyes
Mcgroob was never looked at the same after that 

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r/OCPoetry • • 15h ago

Feedback Please These are some words about love

3 Upvotes

These are words about love:

Poetry is the way to say without saying
let me rip open my chest and pour out
“I love you” “I love you” “I love you”

Let me be a rose, and you can be the sun
Let me be the sun, and you can be the sky
Unoriginal garbage like that

Can you hear it anyway?
The “I love you” shining in my heart - like a firefly's coy glow

What can I say? 
“Please stay by my side”
Is it really that simple?

Then maybe poetry is just a way to repeat what has already been said 
But sometimes the only way to feel “I love you” is to say

Let me rip open my chest and pour out
all the disguised words -
and land on your finger for just a moment, before flying into the darkening sky

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r/OCPoetry • • 16h ago

Feedback Please Dog Walking (I did and saw all this [apart from the godly images] today, dog walking)

3 Upvotes

Today I saw Poseidon's rain
Come down upon a sunny day.
Across that noisy water park
Did Sol's old pointing finger arc.

I followed His wise guiding light;
So trampled I on lost tree bones,
Then up the hill who hears my groans.
And much to my surprised delight,

I'm standing by Siddhartha's stream;
Where life is but a holy dream.
I glimpse two rainbow's happy glow.
I listen gently to the flow.

The Angels dance within my mind
Just like a falling autumn leaf.
But I must go, leave all behind -
Yet don't you mope, nor hold no grief.

For as we dream this scenery,
We breathe it now, a life anew.
And don't you fall for trickery -
It always was inside of you.

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r/OCPoetry • • 18h ago

Feedback Please Visit My Grave

4 Upvotes

At least, come visit my grave.
Hold the soil between your fingers,
Shed a tear,
Smile once while saying my name.
Or simply stand there,
And let my name cross your mind.
For a moment longer than a stranger's.

Perhaps then,
My foolish soul may rest,
Knowing that even in death,
I was remembered by you

The one I chose
Over peace.

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/w8WtiBJkGJ

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/73rdR9eeJU


r/OCPoetry • • 18h ago

Just Sharing the mirror

7 Upvotes

the mirror

i have spent so much time trying not to become angry like my father

i became sad like my mother

i spend my days swallowing my anger, trying to not let it consume me

i end up falling asleep in my sadness so that i can feel

i look in the mirror when i cry

and i can see her smile

when i set my fork down before i have begun

i can see her laughter

i cannot call her on the phone without recognizing my own voice

i have spent so much time trying not to become my father, I have become what he hated most

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/WJWMulFtnd

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r/OCPoetry • • 20h ago

Feedback Please Tiredness

3 Upvotes

I’m tired

Tired to pretend that everything is great, when it’s not

Tired to force myself to do things when I don’t want to,

Is a feeling that draws all your energy, 

is like being with low battery in your body,

every movement, every action, feels like an eternity,

doesn’t have strength enough, like thousand bricks in your body, 

making you feel heavy.

This tiredness doesn’t want to go,

it will disappear when I start to feel happiness, human connection,

that is when those bricks will transform in wings and flowers,

and allow me to live again.

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/1xgx0ze/the_life_of_the_trees/

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/1xgx3c8/be_still_thy_heart/


r/OCPoetry • • 20h ago

Feedback Please Don’t Look In The Trees

2 Upvotes

And I will tell you to not look
out at the battalion of trees: poplar, pine, and hickory.
Gnarled Limbs reaching out in every direction.
Roots spilt on earth like ink crawling from page.

It learns your name, it does.
Calls you home in your mother’s tongue,
“Supper’s done, baby, come clean up!”
so that you will meet its face like a babe -
and when you do, it’s far too late.

Spilled and poured, decompose and wane.
Soaked into earth and the vultures fly away.
Now rest.

It had whistled like my granny did,
knew all the old holiness gospel -
as if it had curled up on the welcome mat
of her church like a lazy tomcat.

It does not wield a weapon,
but if it did,
it’d grasp my papaw’s pocket knife -
he fed me apple slices off of as a kid.

Bitten and devoured, swallowed and ate.
Conserved for energy and but tastes like paste.
Now rest.

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/xcsOEJQnWg
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r/OCPoetry • • 20h ago

Just Sharing Be still thy heart

3 Upvotes

Be still thy heart

Boom boom.

Stillness and silence, body immobile,

laying as if i was in a casket own demise

Boom boom

feeling the coldness blanketing

the blackness depths of my resolve.

Boom boom

Heart Beating slower across my body,

head feeling each of the beats.

Boom boom

missing the you, the love it needs

to flourish in the cold darkness I feel

Jeremy_jerms

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r/OCPoetry • • 20h ago

Feedback Please The Life of the Trees

14 Upvotes

The Life of the Trees

We just need to fight for the life of the trees,
The calm and the silent, the nature of wild.
Listen and hear her begs and her pleas,
The modern world has our spirits beguiled.

A constant attempt to separate from source,
It seems our beginning is fading from memory.
Our ancestral roots, the previous course,
While Mother Earth is fading to schemery.
A deceptive attempt to innovate and build
Shareholder value—that is, we lied, and we drilled.

It’s not too late to save what sustains us;
We just need to listen to her begs and her pleas.
Mother Earth is in pain, though she knows forgiveness;
We just need to fight for the life of the trees.

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/eCt3GXyHEO

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/i45zvGxRPY


r/OCPoetry • • 1h ago

Feedback Please THE CHAPTER I REREAD OFTEN

0 Upvotes

I felt something again,

again that my life had

had stuck somewhere

I tried calling it a phase,

but it stuck inside me '

Time has passed , but

i am just sitting on the verge

of something

I am quite

- no sounds

- no emotions

Just me and my phase

Some chapters are not meant to be yours

whenever it hits me ,

my whole world clashes

JUST ME ,

MY THOUGHTS AND

THE CHAPTER I REREAD OFTEN

- In the quiet

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r/OCPoetry • • 23h ago

Feedback Please listening

2 Upvotes

What does it mean to have two ears and one mouth

when the mouth is bound like a wound,

and the ears weep cherry-red pus?

 

When the flies have one-thousand mouths

Come to feed on the slough on the cheek bones,

walk all over the scabbed eyes?

 

They are only a racking hum from inside

 

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